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Stuck??? by ~Ms-internet-stalker:iconMs-internet-stalker:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Song


[[Whispered]]
{What's between the shattered words}
{and empty spaces?}
{What crawls in the dark}
{and whispers your name?}
{Do you fear what you can never know?}

There's a lot to say,
and a little time to say it;
You can spill lies from your mouth,
and candy coat the truth;
But babe I'm here to tell you,
deception will swallow you whole;

There's dark things moving,
everything is spinning,
you can't always tell where you are;
So curl up alone,
and watch those dark things chase you
This is your personal hell
©2008-2009 ~Ms-internet-stalker
:iconms-internet-stalker:

Author's Comments

Ugh... I'm really stuck on this one. But it's the first thing I've written in a REALLY long time, so I figured I'd post it. :P

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~xoxo-fading-oxox Mar 29, 2008, 3:42:03 PM
I like it :)
The meaning is distant and abstract in a way. It makes you think.

Great work!
:iconms-internet-stalker:
~Ms-internet-stalker Mar 29, 2008, 4:18:37 PM
Thank you very much.

--
"My queerness, is not a vice, is not deliberate, and harms no one."- Natalie Barney :pride:

"And now it's comin' clear,
that I don't need you here
and in this world around me,
I'm glad you disappear."
:iconlilacgold:
~lilacgold Apr 5, 2008, 8:14:33 AM
Awesome! I like it. It's slightly creepy and more than a little scary, but in a good way. I will never lie again. Well done, little sister!
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~Ms-internet-stalker Apr 6, 2008, 1:55:02 PM
Thank you very much. It was awesome to stretch my writing muscles after sitting so long.

--
"My queerness, is not a vice, is not deliberate, and harms no one."- Natalie Barney :pride:

"And now it's comin' clear,
that I don't need you here
and in this world around me,
I'm glad you disappear."
:iconlilacgold:
~lilacgold Apr 7, 2008, 12:37:18 PM
I bet! I should bring over my new stuff from AP, although most of it sucks (contest entries lack to originality of normal poetry, I tend to find)
:iconms-internet-stalker:
~Ms-internet-stalker Apr 7, 2008, 12:44:44 PM
I agree. I don't enter contests that don't allow pre-writes anymore. Stuff that has to fit a theme just doesn't work for me, ya know?

Oh, and the ONE sonnet I ever did completely SUCKED because I had to use a standard form.

--
"My queerness, is not a vice, is not deliberate, and harms no one."- Natalie Barney :pride:

"And now it's comin' clear,
that I don't need you here
and in this world around me,
I'm glad you disappear."
:iconlilacgold:
~lilacgold Apr 7, 2008, 1:02:08 PM
Ah, that sucks. I brought more stuff over just now, if you're interested, including the, um, interesting one I mentioned a while back :D
:iconms-internet-stalker:
~Ms-internet-stalker Apr 7, 2008, 2:36:07 PM
I noticed. ^__^

--
"My queerness, is not a vice, is not deliberate, and harms no one."- Natalie Barney :pride:

"And now it's comin' clear,
that I don't need you here
and in this world around me,
I'm glad you disappear."
:iconlilacgold:
~lilacgold Apr 10, 2008, 6:23:53 AM
Hehe that's pretty much the only one I'm truly proud of in my latest additions. The others are a bit rubbish really. Well, one of them is sort of ok.
:iconms-internet-stalker:
~Ms-internet-stalker Apr 10, 2008, 6:23:33 PM
Well, at least you get to let the creative juices flow, y'know?

DUDE, that rhymed twice. o_o

--
"My queerness, is not a vice, is not deliberate, and harms no one."- Natalie Barney :pride:

"And now it's comin' clear,
that I don't need you here
and in this world around me,
I'm glad you disappear."
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